Rewrite the paragraph below so that it has more flow. Combine sentences as needed, but make sure that there are smooth, logical, and grammatical transitions from one point to the next and that your grammar is correct. Joining words (a.k.a coordinating conjunctions) often help; feel to also create subordinate or dependent clauses. The St. Martin’s Handbook covers all of these skills and techniques. Be sure, however, that none of the essential factual information or the main ideas are omitted in your new version.
Peyton Manning was a star NFL quarterback from 1998-2016. He retired last year. He has a bad neck. My sister can throw a football better than he could in his final season. Manning won five league MVP awards and two Super Bowls. One was with the Indianapolis Colts. The other was with the Denver Broncos. He lost two as well. Most people think Tom Brady is better. They will both be Hall of Famers. Peyton’s brother Eli is also a Super Bowl-winning quarterback. Their dad Archie was a pro quarterback too. It is like the letters QB are part of their DNA. Peyton has been in many television commercials and sings the chicken parm song. Papa John is his best friend. He hosted Saturday Night live in 2007. In 2015 the al-Jazeera network said Manning used HGH but he was exonerated. At the University of Tennessee he was accused of an up-close and “pants around the ankles” mooning of a co-ed team manager that led to a lawsuit. Peyton likes to do pranks. The one at Tennessee crossed a line into sexual harassment probably. He looks funny. His net worth is approximately $300 million dollars. His goofy oversized face is laughing all the way to the bank.
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