I have attached the original paper and the feedback i have received on it if you could simply edit and add accordingly, thank you!
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FEEDBACKThis is a brief, nicely crafted document that offers a good explanationof the device, potentially for a customer who wants to betterunderstand the new technology. However, there is further room tobuild the technical description aspect. Envision taking the device apartand using your prose to describe the internal components that actuallymake the television work. This prose can then be supported byillustrations to enhance your novice reader’s understanding of thetopic. Thank you!Julie MossTechnical descriptionGraphics